My poem...what do you think?

Question

Reflection with infection has lead me here
Cold, lonely with no-one near
Di-cast with echoes of past transgressions
Thoughts, hopes in a state of repression

The man I want to be... I see, is just out of reach
Through the barrier I cant breach
A miracle to break the circle is required
Dreams, ideas need inspired

Feelings leave me reeling, blind and lost
Leaving all others to count the cost
I fear those I should hold near and love
I’m not worthy so I shout and shove

Rain caused by pain was an afterthought
I’m AM sorry but don’t deserve what I’ve got
About-face, enter the race and thrive
I may feel dead but I am alive

★☆♥iiSa:D♥☆★ · Accepted Answer

Boy! You are SUper GOOD!! Good Job. I like it a lot... Much of love for you..♥♥♥...keep writing i think you can make it.!

wyllow · Answer

It definitely communicates that you are having a rough time. I am sorry about that but I can relate. I feel pretty similarly right now. Keep writing. Who cares what people think as long as it helps you.

Anonyme · Answer

It is really good eventhough i cant comprehend much of it cus im 13 i still think it's very good and emtional

Kelly K · Answer

this is a very well thought out poem.
rhyming poems are most definitely
the hardest to put all together, it
is obvious this poem was written with
emotion, i say it's wonderful.

yaneka · Answer

it is very good, kind of sad, 
you have a lot of sensitivity and deep thoughts, that makes a great poet
nurture your talent, keep writing!

Anonyme · Answer

That's really good! Wonder-wonder-wonderful. You should ask to put it in your local newspaper.

Michael M · Answer

Hmm I don't really like Rhyming poems... but Ok

Kathleen · Answer

I like it

slipknotsamer666 · Answer

I think tht its good, but u need a title!

JESS · Answer

it's really good; it actually means alot to me because i can somewhat relate to it. goood job

My poem...what do you think?

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